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  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: The Fish and His Roommate

    im not graet with critesim, or spelling for that mater. this a wonderfull story, this is a great bed time story, its funny,i realy like this story, keep writing like ...

    Feb 2, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Short Stories Re: A Blade

    Well it’s good, the word choice is not great but it has poetical, I think you should continue with the story. It sounds a little broad like I guess not ...

    Jan 28, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: night man

    Night Man By Johnny Schuler In the dark a shadow moved through the forest and into the pasture. The moon lit its path into the herd of cattle. It did ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Magician, a folk tale

    The beginning is great it gives a folk tale type feeling, it’s written in a great way. The story is a little vague, but I got most of it, the ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: The Runner, the strategist and the Outcast

    It a good start, feels a little surreal, but it grabbed me I do think you should continue. It grabbed me, I do wonder though, are there only female characters. ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Apple a Day

    This i a hilarious story, it’s kind of cynical in a way but impossible to take this seriously, it’s got bad word chose but it’s great, its written in a ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: A Winter Walk [EDITED]

    It’s a good story, but the word choice is not great. It snowed just recently on my property, and my dog, Jessica, acts similar to the way the dog in ...

    Jan 27, 2011
  • Action/Adventure Novels Re: shade: curse of the shadows heart

    Shade Curse of the Shadows Heart There are many other existences beyond our own. Were beast can talk and the human race is not the only intelligent beings, were the ...

    Dec 19, 2009


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